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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 7, 2012 21:39:46 GMT -5
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Jul 10, 2012 18:32:01 GMT -5
I enjoyed the first chapter. So much fun. A playful and sexy Dean is a winner. Looking forward to some payback from Sam.  This is a nice change from the dark fanfics. I posted a review. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 11, 2012 22:13:47 GMT -5
I enjoyed the first chapter. So much fun. A playful and sexy Dean is a winner. Looking forward to some payback from Sam. This is a nice change from the dark fanfics. I posted a review. I'm glad you like it. Thank you for the review. ![]() They are fun to read, are you guest reviewer Minnie1950? I just posted chapter 2. www.fanfiction.net/s/8297034/2/Sam_and_Dean_take_a_cruise |
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Jul 12, 2012 0:11:09 GMT -5
Yes, because that is the name I had on the CW and most people know me by that name. You have been working hard. Will read Chapter 2.
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 12, 2012 10:26:04 GMT -5
Yes, because that is the name I had on the CW and most people know me by that name. You have been working hard. Will read Chapter 2. I knew that name and I didn't realize you were the same person until that review. I write fast, my hubby has been proof reading and it took him longer to proof read the chapter then for me to write it. The whole story is in my head. I know how it ends, it's basically the details and different characters that pop into the chapter as I write. That is the fun part to me. Because until I'm sitting in front of the computer writing; these characters aren't in my mind. Who knew these stange people like Daisy were floating around in my head just waiting for me to get front of a computer.  It does make sense I cut hair for 14 years in California I have met some interesting people in my life.  However, none of the people in this story are based on anyone in my life. They have traits of different people I have met. Chapter 2 hopefully you will laugh at some descriptions of people. The part I really want to get correct is the bond between Sam and Dean. One of my favorite episodes is Mystery Spot. Because it starts are humor and as you go along a deeper meaning comes through. The whole thing gets serious and sad for poor Sammy. I'm hoping to mix humor, but to also have something deeper (plotwise) that makes you want to keep reading. This is my first fanfic. So hopefully I can pull it off. I do love writing and have taken quite a few writing courses. But I'm dyslexic that is why I need a proof reader. For example; "For" and "of" my brain reverses same with "now" and "how." Also in chapter 2 I wrote "oblivious" when I meant "obvious." I hate these mistakes the ruin the flow of the story. I re read the chapter 5 times and still missed these things.  Stupid brain. My hubby catches them he is a great proof reader. But he also doesn't want the job. So I might have to find a beta reader. |
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Jul 18, 2012 17:19:29 GMT -5
You and hubby make an excellent team because I see nothing distracting while reading the story. I wanted to "favorite" you and I had to try multiple log-ins because I have so many different log-ins, I had no idea what it was. I am enjoying your story immensely. It has humor, suspense and shock value. The characters are real and colorful. People who stopped reading fan-fics when they became depressing should give this story a read. Very entertaining. At the end of the second chapter, I was thinking employees of cruise lines would love that chapter. My user name is Baltimoron48. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 19, 2012 8:59:28 GMT -5
Thank you for making the story one of your favorites.  That made me smile. I finished the first draft of Chapter 3 and it's long. I had the ending point in mind when I started so I kept writing until I got there. I figured for a first fan fiction I wanted something fun. There are a lot of dark fictions. Sometimes we got to smile. I find myself giving this story a kind of hell house prank war vibe. I'm glad your are enjoying it. Tonight I will re read and edit chapter 3. If it drags to much in parts I might cut those out. I don't want to bore you guys. My hubby is a great editor. Trust me the typos would be distracting if he wasn't reading and correcting them. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 20, 2012 0:25:50 GMT -5
I finished Chapter 3 it's still long. I didn't see anything I wanted to cut. I hope it flows well. I printed it and gave it to my lazy editor, my hubby. I will probably re read it six times, before he read it. He is so slow. Last chapter I read 5 times and he still caught a bunch of typos. He is worth the wait. But I hate waiting. |
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Jul 21, 2012 19:03:14 GMT -5
I finished Chapter 3 it's still long. I didn't see anything I wanted to cut. I hope it flows well. I printed it and gave it to my lazy editor, my hubby. I will probably re read it six times, before he read it. ![]() He is so slow. Last chapter I read 5 times and he still caught a bunch of typos. He is worth the wait. But I hate waiting. Congratulations on completing chapter 3. Completing it is the difficult part; now you can play around with it until hubby finishes the proofreading. I'll be waiting. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 22, 2012 18:01:22 GMT -5
I finished Chapter 3 it's still long. I didn't see anything I wanted to cut. I hope it flows well. I printed it and gave it to my lazy editor, my hubby. I will probably re read it six times, before he read it. ![]() He is so slow. Last chapter I read 5 times and he still caught a bunch of typos. He is worth the wait. But I hate waiting. Congratulations on completing chapter 3. Completing it is the difficult part; now you can play around with it until hubby finishes the proofreading. I'll be waiting. He finished!! Yeah  I have chapter 3 up. If he didn't do such good work I would go with someone else. Plus I think he's getting into it now. www.fanfiction.net/s/8297034/3/ |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Jul 30, 2012 21:30:57 GMT -5
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Aug 3, 2012 16:36:12 GMT -5
I read chapter 4 on my phone; I need to log in so I can post my comments.
I enjoyed every word of chapter 4. It came to life for me and made me want to see it on the screen. It would be heavenly to watch. You chose a perfect way to end the chapter, too. Kudos, my friend.
I can't say more here because there would be spoilers. If you want to know what's happening, I encourage you to read the story if you like action, drama and comedy all mixed into one.
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 5, 2012 21:20:25 GMT -5
I read chapter 4 on my phone; I need to log in so I can post my comments. I enjoyed every word of chapter 4. It came to life for me and made me want to see it on the screen. It would be heavenly to watch. You chose a perfect way to end the chapter, too. Kudos, my friend. I can't say more here because there would be spoilers. If you want to know what's happening, I encourage you to read the story if you like action, drama and comedy all mixed into one. Thank you I'm getting a kick out of writing this. Sam and Dean have to do whatever I want.  Chapter five has just been posted. Thank you for your reviews they really encourage me. ;D www.fanfiction.net/s/8297034/5/ |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 12, 2012 21:48:04 GMT -5
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Aug 20, 2012 14:58:54 GMT -5
 Getting ready to read Chapter 7. Thank you!
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 21, 2012 0:12:31 GMT -5
![]() Getting ready to read Chapter 7. Thank you! ![]() Here is a link for anyone lurking that wants to read chapter 7. I would like to know if that prank came off funny or not. It's hard for me to judge sometimes.  www.fanfiction.net/s/8297034/7/ |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 21, 2012 21:35:04 GMT -5
Now that I have seen your review and thank you so much for that. ;D I always enjoy your reviews. Here is the picture I promised. ![]() |
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Aug 21, 2012 22:16:19 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Absolutely amazing.[/glow]
Your imagination plus your gift for research and using information that crosses your path makes the story extremely interesting.
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Post by davidhayes1956 on Aug 21, 2012 23:25:25 GMT -5
Now that I have seen your review and thank you so much for that. ;D I always enjoy your reviews. Here is the picture I promised. ![]() Snake cake! |
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Post by Aeryn on Aug 21, 2012 23:58:31 GMT -5
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 22, 2012 6:59:52 GMT -5
Now that I have seen your review and thank you so much for that. ;D I always enjoy your reviews. Here is the picture I promised. ![]() Snake cake! Yummy! ![]() |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 22, 2012 7:01:29 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Absolutely amazing.[/glow] Your imagination plus your gift for research and using information that crosses your path makes the story extremely interesting. Thank you I wasn't sure of that came off funny. But I'm glad to see it did. ;D In my head it's super funny. With Dean's girly screams. |
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Aug 23, 2012 11:24:55 GMT -5
My Gary said no way would he get close enough to slice that; nor would he eat it. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 23, 2012 16:20:29 GMT -5
My Gary said no way would he get close enough to slice that; nor would he eat it. ![]() That's funny, Gary's not a fan of snakes. I guess you have a prank for April fools day. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Aug 26, 2012 20:15:13 GMT -5
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Aug 26, 2012 20:24:39 GMT -5
You're doing great!
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Sept 2, 2012 14:54:29 GMT -5
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Sept 9, 2012 20:18:42 GMT -5
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Post by AntiArbitrator on Sept 12, 2012 20:15:57 GMT -5
Chapter 10 is awesome. You already have two reviews; one is mine, of course. |
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Post by evilsquirre1 on Sept 20, 2012 19:47:25 GMT -5
Chapter 10 is awesome. You already have two reviews; one is mine, of course. I got up to 4 reviews on Chapter 10 but more people started following I dig that. Chapter 11 is finally up. I got behind because my hubby made me go camping. Enjoy! I was feeling goofy when I wrote this so Sam and Dean as doing so interesting things. www.fanfiction.net/s/8297034/11/ |
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This is a nice change from the dark fanfics.
It does make sense I cut hair for 14 years in California I have met some interesting people in my life. 
Stupid brain. My hubby catches them he is a great proof reader. But he also doesn't want the job. So I might have to find a beta reader.
